Monday, August 14, 2017

Author Intrusion by Mary Deal




Author intrusion is something I saw a bit of in new writers’ manuscripts when I did a lot of editing.

A story is usually told through the mind of one or more characters. It’s known as the story’s point of view (POV). (Also see the article Choosing a Point of View above in The Parts) The reader is only allowed to know what the point of view character perceives and experiences internally.

Here’s a correct sentence written through a character’s mind, told in 3rd Person POV:

~ Sara watched with nerves on edge, unsure of what she was seeing.

Now told using author intrusion:

~ If we look at Sara, we see that she is hesitant about getting involved.

In the 3rd Person POV, we are in Sara’s mind experiencing hesitation with her.
In the author intrusion example, the author stopped the story to speak directly to the reader, telling the reader what Sara experiences, instead of letting the reader be Sara.
In the past, many stories were told in this manner. The author seemed to speak directly to the reader, or as if the writer were addressing a group of people. This method of storytelling has become passé. Readers want to become their favorite characters and experience with them and not simply be told by a narrator.
Author intrusion is easily avoided if the writer stays in the mind of the point of view character. The character will not stop the story to speak to the readers.


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Friday, August 11, 2017

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Wednesday, August 2, 2017

A Whale of a Tale

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Hawaii, in the mid-twentieth century, where the turquoise ocean, emerald green landscape and miles of sandy beaches lure you into a native woman's world. Lissa's unexpected meeting with a baby humpback whale begins a tale of unlikely friendship, commitment, and love, shining through years of life on an ever-growing island paradise. Lurking in the prosperity of growth, however, is danger, drama, and threats to the animal population. Lissa must deal with all of it in her quiet quest to take care of her whale friend, Henri.

This novel will transport you to the lush warm island of Maui, and beckon you to swim with the whales while living life in paradise. The story spans several decades, unfolding with Lissa and Henri's youthful naivete, and following them as they grow into the wisdom of their middle years. 

Henri and Lissa are constants for each other as they follow their personal, sometimes arduous journeys. Their secret, unique, inter-species relationship will face challenges survival will be at risk. Lissa will learn to listen to her intuition,overcome obstacles and take inspired action while following her own path to empowerment as she strives to save his kind and his home.  Can one person make a difference?
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